Follow Me and how to Make Every Scene Seeable

Good morning, readers, writers and other word enthusiasts!

First of all, you can follow this fledgling blog at Bloglovin, which is my favorite aggregator. I like the way it allows you to set up lists for your interests, so you can just read the stuff about one topic and save the others for later. Here’s a link: Follow my blog with Bloglovin

Second, I am working with a great writing teacher in Sherman Oaks, CA. If you would like to check her out, she has a Wednesday evening class at 7pm. You can audit the first class and see if it is a good fit for you.

For more info on Claudette Sutherland’s writing class,

I’m thinking I’ll be moved to write a new blog post frequently on Thursday mornings, since I work with Claudette on Wednesday nights. I am learning so much from her. I feel as if I’ve been walking through an old mansion in the dark, and someone just came in with a candle.


Something she talks about frequently is making a scene SEEABLE. Last night she gave me a great rule to write by:

  • Anytime you change to a new setting, make sure we can see it, and we know where and when we are, and who’s there, what’s at risk.
  • You do it with little brush strokes, little pictures, details of the senses.
Here’s an example from my first chapter:

The enormous horned creature crouched in the center of the gold disc just yards in front of Avery, ready to spring. Its mandibles clicked together. White hot liquid churned in its mouth. It shifted on segmented limbs, talons scraping the black floor. 

Sunlight pierced the high narrow windows, struck the beast’s gray glass talons and threw shards of brilliance onto curved stone walls. Light licked along the fine gold lines of the many-pointed shape on the black floor.

Can you picture this scene?
Thanks for reading!

I am a Writer

I’m almost done with my second draft of my first novel, Tigers Slow Awake. I’ve been thinking I should have a blog about writing and process and how the heck do you get from just a few vague ideas to 160,000 words. And how do you get from there to something you actually feel confident querying an agent or editor about?

I don’t know yet what that will be like, but I know I’m going to do it.

I’m writing a synopsis, something like you’d see on a book jacket, something that tells the story and sells it, too. But it’s scary to face the task of putting all my plot in one place. I suppose there’s something daunting about every phase of writing a novel.

I’m using the program Scrivener to wrangle this draft, and although I like it, I find the Compile feature was not at all intuitive. I had to do a deep web search to get it to come out the way I wanted, and it’s still not quite there. I’m so ready for Scrivener to have its own app. Apparently they have been working on that at for more than three years. This is supposed to be the year they get there. I wish them the best of luck! I could really use that app!

And I’m working with a great writing teacher in Sherman Oaks, Claudette Sutherland. I’ve put her website link here. She gives great supportive feedback and I think she’s helping get my prose into line, among many other helpful things!

One thing I’m struggling with is how to inject imagery into the action so the reader knows exactly where they are and can really picture it. It’s quite a discipline to write that way, a good challenge.

Wish me luck! I’ll keep you posted!